The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The picture illustrates how olive oil is manufactured, which conludes several transformations.
The linear man-made process involves seven main stages, beginning when the farmer collects the olives and ending when the final products are sold to customers.
At the beginning of the process, olives are directly collected from the trees and gathered in bunches, after which they are cleaned with cold water using a rinsing machine.
Next,
they are conveyed into another machine for smashing through a transferring carousel system. At Linking Words
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stage, the olives are transformed into two different products which are olive paste and olive stones.
The production continues with the paste being stored in bags with holes. Linking Words
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, it is put under pressure in a container before being separated in a specialised device. Linking Words
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, olive oil, as the final product of the process, is isolated from the paste, leaving water as a by-product. Linking Words
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, it is stored and ready for sale.Linking Words
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