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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time
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line graph below illustrates the quantity of
books
 that were borrowed in 4 different months in 2014 from four libraries,and the pie chart shows the proportion of
books
,by type,that were borrowed over
this
 time.
Overall
,we can see that in June and
September
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September,
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 the number of taken
books
 from West Eaton and Church Mount was equal,the figures were 50 in June and 150 in September
books
 respectively,with the pie chart it is noticeable that the percentage of science and biography
books
 are the same. As can be seen from the graph,
number
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 of
books
 borrowed from Sutton Wood had decreased sharply from 270
books
 to 100
books
,but from
august
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August
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 to September it increased significantly.Unfortunately,for Ryeslip the situation is different, it had
downward
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 trend,
in
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 four months the number has decreased by about 80
books
.
By contrast
,fiction
books
 are
most
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 borrowed
types
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 of
books
,
makes
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 up just under a half
percent
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,which can't be said about self-help
books
, they make up a tiny minority.
Also
 turning to details, between July and August, from west eaton quantity of borrowed
books
 grew smoothly and
then
leveled
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 out,but in Church
mount
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Mount
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 it just gradually increased.
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