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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time
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The line graph depicts the number of
books
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 borrowed from four village libraries over four months in 2014,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the proportions of
books
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 borrowed by genre during the same period.
Overall
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, borrowing trends varied significantly across the libraries, with
Sutton
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Wood
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 displaying the most noticeable fluctuations.
Fiction
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books
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 were the most popular category among readers,
whereas
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Self-help
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books
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 were the least preferred. The data from the line graph highlights that
Sutton
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Wood
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 consistently recorded the highest number of
books
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 borrowed, reaching a peak of 300.
In contrast
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, both West Eaton and Ryeslip experienced minimal variation, maintaining figures around 150 throughout the period. Church Mount,
however
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, saw a gradual decline in the number of
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 borrowed, dropping from 300 in June to approximately 175 by September.
Sutton
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Wood
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 showed a mix of increases and decreases over the months, ultimately ending at its peak of 300
books
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.
According to
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 the pie chart, the genres of borrowed
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 included Science,
Fiction
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, Biography, History, and
Self-help
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. Science emerged as the most
favored
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 category, comprising 43% of the total
books
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 borrowed.
Fiction
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 followed closely,
while
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Self-help
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books
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 accounted for the smallest proportion at just 10%. The remaining genres—Biography and History—contributed moderately to the
overall
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 borrowing statistics. In summary, reading preferences during the summer months displayed noticeable variation across libraries, with
Sutton
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Wood
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 standing out for its fluctuating trends. Meanwhile, readers showed a clear preference for Science and
Fiction
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books
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, dedicating less attention to
Self-help
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 materials.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, sutton, wood, fiction, self-help with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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