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The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where

The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where
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The given bar chart compares international
aids
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aid
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 from 6
countries
 of first world to second
countries
 between 2008 and 2010.
Overall
,
US
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the US
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 was leading in
all
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apply
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that time period and had probably two times more than
average
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the average
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aids
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aid
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 of other developed
countries
as
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such as
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UK
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the UK
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 and Japan. Getting back to the details US had not under 20 billion dollars
aid
 in every year, but the peak was in 2010, when
this
 amount reached 25 billion US dollars.
Countries
 like Germany,
UK
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the UK
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 and Japan had no less than
10-billion-dollar
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10 billion in
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aid
 for developing
countries
 all over
period
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the period
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 and most of them were in 2009- and 2010-year’s Germany, 2010 year’s UK and 2008 year’s Japan.
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The Netherland
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Netherlands
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and Sweden are ending
this
 rating, so they
had
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have
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 no more than 10 billion dollars
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of outer
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outer
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of outer
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aid
 every single year. But the peak of both of these two
countries
 was in 2009 with little difference from other years.
Due to
given
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the given
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 information, some
countries
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country's
countries'
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aid
for
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to
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 other
countries
 with developing
economics
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economies
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 not
so
Correct word choice
as
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 much as
US
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the US
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, but some of them reached
the
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apply
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half of that amount.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, aid with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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