Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
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towards reducing environmentally non-friendly packaging.
Given the current fierce competition in the market,it is inevitable that suppliers tend to make their products eye- catchy
with many redundant wrappings in order to increase the chances of catching the eye of the customers among similar varieties of goods. Correct your spelling
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results
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the manufacturers also
have an obligation towards this
concern and need to take immediate actions to break such
patterns. For instance
, recently, major retail companies such
as Adidas, Nike
have moved to minimal and eco-friendly product manufacturing and distribution.
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towards minimizing the amount of packaging used.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion. However, your support for each view can be more detailed. For example, elaborating on how manufacturers might implement changes could provide a stronger argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, some sentences can be clearer and more concise. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'this simple gesteld' and ensure grammatical correctness.
structure
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion in your essay, which frames your discussion well.
task achievement
Your essay covers both perspectives on the topic, demonstrating a balanced approach.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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