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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the number of Australian money
of
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from
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 Australian
trade
 with China, Japan and
United
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the United
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 States between
the
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apply
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2004
till
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and
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 2009.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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Australia's
trade
 with China and
United
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the United
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 States showed
the
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a
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 simple increase and decrease ;
while
 numbers in
trade
 with Japan
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 sharply.
To begin
, illustrations demonstrate
exports
 and imports. Imports in Australia's
trade
 with China
started
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started to
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 grow from about 18
billion
 in 2004 and got 30
billion
 in 2008. Meanwhile,
exports
 started from 12
billion
, later in 2007
it
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apply
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stepped-up
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stepped up
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 to 35
billion
 in 2009.
Also
, in the
trade
 with
United
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the United
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 States
import's
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import
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 profit was between 20 and 25
billions
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billion
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, and fell down until 20
billions
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billion
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 in 2009.
In addition
, the
exports
 were 9
billions
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billion
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 in 2004, and reached the highest point in 2008.
Otherwise
,
the
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apply
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Australia's
trade
 with Japan's
exports
 had started from 20
billions
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billion
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, and sharply
flactuated
Correct your spelling
fluctuated
fluctuates
fluctuate
 between 2007 and 2009. In the years 2007 it
riched
Verb problem
reached
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 30
billion
,
then
 acutely
griwed
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grew
till
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to
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 40
billion
 in 2008 and straightaway went to 30
billion
. Imports in
this
trade
 were stable until 2007, later in 2008 accurately additioned.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, exports, billion, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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