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With the advances in science and technology, people from different ends of the world can communicate with each other. What is your opinion on the impact of technology on our lives? Do you think that these advances only result in positive outcomes?

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Technology
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important
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i
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believe
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people
 lived in the past without it.
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technology
give
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the
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people
 many facilities
as
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the
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comunication
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communication
 with each other
easly
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easily
 over the
worled
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world
 by using video call
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oudio
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audio
call
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 sending messages in
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,helping
people
 to know the cultures of other countries using the internet and applications. There are many
advandeges
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advantages
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technolog
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technology
 like playing video games ,watching films as
an
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entertainment,
help
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helping
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people
 to
searsh
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search
 for
any thing
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things
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 about any field and the
student
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students
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 in learning.
the
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technology
as
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 phon cell, computer,ipad and
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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help
people
 to live
there
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their
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life
easly
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easily
easy
 but it
make
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 them face many problems like staying kids for
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longe
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long
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 time
infront
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in front
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for playing
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game
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games
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 which
make
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 them have no social interaction in
realty
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reality
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 and have no time to do exercise to be fit and comunicating with others can mix the cultures. The impact of
the
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technology
 on our life
sometime
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sometimes
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 beneficial and
sometime
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sometimes
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 not
that is
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 on how we use it
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