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Band 2.5

With the advances in science and technology, people from different ends of the world can communicate with each other. What is your opinion on the impact of technology on our lives? Do you think that these advances only result in positive outcomes?

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Technology
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believe
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people
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 lived in the past without it.
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technology
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people
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comunication
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communication
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world
 by using video call
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audio
call
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,helping
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 to know the cultures of other countries using the internet and applications. There are many
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advantages
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technolog
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technology
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entertainment,
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people
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things
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 about any field and the
student
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students
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technology
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internet
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life
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 them face many problems like staying kids for
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longe
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in front
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for playing
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game
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games
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make
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 them have no social interaction in
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 and have no time to do exercise to be fit and comunicating with others can mix the cultures. The impact of
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technology
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 on our life
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 beneficial and
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 on how we use it
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You have identified both positive and negative impacts of technology, which shows a balanced understanding of the issue.
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