Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

With technological advancements learning has not been restricted to classes only. There are
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of people who think that
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both methods have their own pros which will be discussed in the
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paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are numerous benefits of traditional
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of learning.
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gives
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, the required exposure to the outside world when kids come out of the comfort of their homes to
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. It gives them the needed courage to talk in public and to develop social skills
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as making friends, being polite, cooperating with other peers etc.
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in the minors when they are made to speak in the class for presentations or answering
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queries. On the flip side,
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learning
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individuals who
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to take some
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which is not available near their residential area.
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from Harward but they are not able to make the commute because of immigration reasons or something else
then
distance
learning seems to be the only option. To add more, it is not only comfortable but
also
saves travelling time and cost as
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does not have to move out of their homes. The only thing they need is
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computer with
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good internet service.
To conclude
, I agree partially with the statement which says that
distance
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one is comfortable
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one increases the
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required to face the world in the future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-learning
  • Virtual classroom
  • Self-paced learning
  • Asynchronous/synchronous sessions
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive learning
  • Accreditation
  • Webinar
  • MOOC (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • Pedagogy
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