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Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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With technological advancements learning has not been restricted to classes only. There are
number
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a number
the number

It appears that the phrase number does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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 of people who think that
distance
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 learning is not a good option.
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

According to
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From

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 my
Correct your spelling
perspective
Correct your spelling
perspective

If you don’t want prespective to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

prespective
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prespective,
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 both methods have their own pros which will be discussed in the
impending
Correct word choice
coming

There may be an adjective issue here.

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 paragraphs.
To begin
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 with, there are numerous benefits of traditional
form
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forms

It seems that form may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 of learning.
As it
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It

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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 gives
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students

It seems that student may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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, the required exposure to the outside world when kids come out of the comfort of their homes to
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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colleges
Fix the agreement mistake
college

It seems that colleges may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. It gives them the needed courage to talk in public and to develop social skills
such
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as making friends, being polite, cooperating with other peers etc.
Moreover
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, it helps to boost
self confidence
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self-confidence

It appears that self confidence is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 in the minors when they are made to speak in the class for presentations or answering
the
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apply

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queries. On the flip side,
distance
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 learning
help
Change the verb form
helps

The plural verb help does not appear to agree with the singular subject distance learning. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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the
Correct article usage
apply

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individuals who
wants
Change the verb form
want

The singular verb wants does not appear to agree with the plural subject the individuals. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 to take some
course
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courses

It seems that course may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 which is not available near their residential area.
For instance
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, if someone wants to learn web
designing
Replace the word
design

The word designing doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 from Harward but they are not able to make the commute because of immigration reasons or something else
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
distance
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 learning seems to be the only option. To add more, it is not only comfortable but
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 saves travelling time and cost as
person
Add an article
a person
the person

The noun phrase person seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 does not have to move out of their homes. The only thing they need is
working
Correct article usage
a working

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 computer with
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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good internet service.
To conclude
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I agree partially with the statement which says that
distance
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 learning is not as beneficial as classroom learning as
former
Correct article usage
the former

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 one is comfortable
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 the
later
Correct your spelling
latter

The word later doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 one increases the
self confidence
Add a hyphen
self-confidence

It appears that self confidence is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 required to face the world in the future.

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task achievement
Although your essay addresses the prompt adequately, there are areas that need improvement. Ensure your ideas are logically organized and clearly expressed. Try to elaborate more on some points for a better understanding.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences are awkwardly structured or unclear. Aim for smoother transitions and clearer topic sentences. Use linking words effectively to guide the reader through your essay.
coherence cohesion
Good job including both an introduction and a conclusion. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance on the topic.
task achievement
Your essay presents relevant points and examples to support your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-learning
  • Virtual classroom
  • Self-paced learning
  • Asynchronous/synchronous sessions
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive learning
  • Accreditation
  • Webinar
  • MOOC (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • Pedagogy
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