Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other, while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
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people
believe that there is a strong correlation between the public in modern
age Correct article usage
the modern
although
some people
bear a notion that individuals are more self-reliance
. in Replace the word
self-reliant
new
age, communities are of abreast Add an article
a new
the new
releance
in all sections, including economy, health, education, culture and so forth, Correct your spelling
reliance
relevance
while
the minority conduct and make decisions out of the society whose decisions would derive from the public.
individuals are dependent with
each Change preposition
on
others
in sorts of Change to a singular noun
other
section
which economic activities are the most significant because Fix the agreement mistake
sections
market
contains various jobs, like banks providing liquidity , factories manufacturing goods, Correct article usage
the market
labours
working in factories, Correct your spelling
labourers
besides
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and
people
consume
things. Wrong verb form
consuming
Therefore
all peopel
engage in Correct your spelling
people
cycle
of Add an article
a cycle
the cycle
processe
which if one of them Correct your spelling
process
processes
eliminated
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is eliminated
for
states.
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to
Secondly
, citizens bear harsh correlation
in order to enhance Fix the agreement mistake
correlations
level
of culture. Add an article
the level
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instance
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instance,
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spacial Correct your spelling
part
concept
by drawing or actors and actresses introduce novel Fix the agreement mistake
concepts
behavior
by acting in Change the spelling
behaviour
theathers
and movies.Correct your spelling
theatres
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, teachers teache
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teach
the
children similar Correct article usage
apply
consept
, Correct your spelling
concepts
additionally
, privet sectors and companies dedicated budget
, and the police provide social security, Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
hence
all of these sould cordinate
with each Correct your spelling
should coordinate
others
in order to changeChange to a singular noun
other
a
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apply
behavior
to norms and beliefs readily.
as outlined above, all Fix the agreement mistake
behaviors
part
of Fix the agreement mistake
parts
community
must have Add an article
the community
cordination
and reliance because Correct your spelling
coordination
currents
affairs are more complicated rather than life in the past. it is possible that some Change the noun form
current
people
are able to be independent in smal
scales but surely, they do not prosper in large scales.Correct your spelling
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