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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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 of electrical
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 and the number of hours forks spent on doing their
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house work
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housework
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 during the duration
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1920 to 2019
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refrigerated
 hitting its pick position of almost 100 by the year of 1980.
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 climbed slightly by 1960 and reached
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little
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stood at 30%
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 and reached its top percentage of almost 90% and it remained untouched till
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2019.
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 almost 50 hours per week,
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 decline and witnessed hitting its low in 2019.
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decreased
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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