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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I, Navdeep
kaur
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, currently
living
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 in
a
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 small town of Bathinda
city
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my thought about the false
information
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, related to my town, contained in your magazine. The
aritcle
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article
 says that the health facilities provided in my hometown are not
reallly
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really
 good
due to
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 the shortage of hospitals and experienced staff
such
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 as doctors or nurses, which is entirely wrong.
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, many private clinics are available nearby for
the
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regular checkups which sell medicines
on
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at
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 reasonable prices.
Nowadys
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Nowadays
, magazines are the popular means of getting knowledge about
the
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current affairs and any wrong data can mislead
the
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users. So,
this
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information
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 had put bad impact on the visitors who
regulary
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regularly
 used to come here. There are some possible solutions that can be taken into action to fix
this
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 mistake. I would suggest you
to
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re-write the article with the correct
information
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and
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 should be highlighted on the front page
,
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 so that people can read the right
information
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. Hope to hear from you
back
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soon
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. Yours faithfully, Navdeep

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coherence cohesion
Try to further develop each paragraph with more linked ideas to provide a clearer logical sequence for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to increase clarity and cohesion.
task achievement
You have a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is very appropriate for a formal letter to the editor.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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