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#sop #research #work
Statement Of Purpose “Success is defined by the which one
enjoy
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 the journey”. After completing four years of graduation in the
field
 of Electrical engineering
along with
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 and after having experience in the
field
 of programming and artificial
intelligence
, I would like to put to use
this
 knowledge to learn my
Masters
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 in the
field
 of computer science engineering. It would give me an upper hand on leading
cutting edge
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technology
 and practical experience that I need to complete low-down and information. For
past
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 few years, the
technology
 in the
field
 of artificial
intelligence
is
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 evolving gradually.
This
 advancement of
the
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artificial
intelligence
 is to increase human comfort at home and at
work
. I would like to be a part of
this
 development to explore the unknown. In
this
era
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technology
 and data are powers in the widest sense of the term not merely only
technology
, that waits.
However
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 when it comes to India in terms of innovations in the
field
 of artificial
intelligence
 is a
late comer
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. Since childhood I’ve been passionate about my
project
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 and academics which reflects upon the course
work
 that I’ve done
along with
 the contributions I have made in various open source platforms
such
 as Github,
Stackoverflow
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StackOverflow
 and
medium
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. Not only have I documented some of my career journey but
also
 I have taught many students and educated them about the
opportunity
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 that
technological
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field
 holds.
Moreover
, I started my hands-on journey
from
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 grade 6th.
Firstly
, I belong to a family of engineers and doctors, I grew up watching my cousins doing their
project
work
 with electrical components and working on computers.
In contrast
,
this
 motivated me to take up core subjects
such
 as electrical and computer engineering. From the
start
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 I have always wanted to experiment on electrical components
along with
 coding to make it more functional.
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example
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 I completed my first
project
work
 related to
remote controlled
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car
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cars
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 and
quadcopter
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 in bachelors 3rd year and as a
group
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group,
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 we
also
 participated in
IIT
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the IIT
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, Bhubaneswar annual competition.
Along with
that
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 I contributed to multiple
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 models related to long transmission line protection and detection.
For
instance
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this
 boosted my confidence in the state of the art technological subjects and doing
research
.
As a result
 of
this
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this,
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 I
could publish
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three
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in three
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 scientific magazines, one of them
in
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at
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IEEE
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the IEEE
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 international conference. Machine learning and deep learning always has been an intriguing subject for me. “Knowledge is power not when it is learned but when it is applied in
the
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real time
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”. As soon as I learned all the Machine Learning and deep learning models, instantly started applying
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them for
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for
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to
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 detecting and classifying various faults in the long transmission lines. Surprisingly I did not stop there I started experimenting with more and more hybrid neural link models. Each of them would give outstanding results with multiple drawbacks to explore more and more to optimize the time consumption.
This
 curiosity not only landed me among the 60 selected students from
whole
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India
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of India
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 for
Indian
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the Indian
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 National Academy Engineers(INAE)
research
 space but
also
 I had the opportunity to
work
 on
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a department
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department
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 of
science
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 and
technology
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Technology
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research
project
 as a
research
 assistant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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