The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital. It shows what percentage of the patients replied ‘very good’ about various aspects of their hospital experience.

The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital. It shows what percentage of the patients replied ‘very good’ about various aspects of their hospital experience.
The bar chart displays the proportion of people who
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‘very
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good’ experience of four different aspects of the time in three wards of a hospital.
Overall
, the percentage range of ‘very good’ replies lay between 40 to 95
percent
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.
According to
the survey, all wards tend to perform better in quality of treatment, but relatively imperfect in waiting time. Holly
ward
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received the highest percentage of positive feedback. Around 90
percent
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per cent
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of patients were satisfied with all features of the survey, except for a 20
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lower proportion number of ‘very good’ replies for the length of waiting.
In contrast
, the Maple
ward
shows the least proficiency among all wards, where about half of its patients reported to have a not ‘very good’
experiences
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experience
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. Oak
ward
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provides a fairly better experience for the patients. After staying in
this
ward
,
a
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apply
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70 percentage above of people marked excellent for the clinic.
However
, it was the least featured in waiting hours
comparing
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to
holly
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the holly
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ward
and maple
ward
.
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