Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disgree.
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volunteer
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work
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is nacassary
nacassary
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necessary
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for
childrens
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children
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benefits
teenagers
and Use synonyms
local
community. In my Add an article
the local
opinion
I completely agree with Add a comma
opinion,
this
point.
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work helps
skills
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teenagers
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work
for Use synonyms
volunteer
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jobs
, they need to learn and improve their Use synonyms
skills
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such
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details
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people
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successful. Use synonyms
Therefore
, they will learn about how to Linking Words
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nomurouse
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numerous
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skills
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childrens
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children
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begin
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children
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interests
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jobs
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for their careers in the future. The Correct your spelling
decisions
type
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types
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the kind
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make
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skills
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jobs
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in
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at
university
.
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the university
teenagers
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work
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volunteers
in their free time because It Change preposition
as volunteers
help
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task achievement
Ensure that your arguments are fully developed and supported with clear, specific examples. For example, provide more detailed illustrations of how volunteering can help develop specific soft skills.
task achievement
Pay attention to consistency in vocabulary and expressions. For example, use 'volunteer work' instead of 'volunteer jobs' for clarity and consistency.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas within and between paragraphs. Use more varied transitional words and avoid repetitive phrases to create a smoother reading experience.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence variety to enhance the readability of your essay. Mixing simple, compound, and complex sentences will make your writing more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which gives it a good structure.
coherence cohesion
You’ve identified and supported your main points well, making your argument relatively clear.
task achievement
The examples provided, though needing more detail, effectively illustrate your points about soft skills and career decisions.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite