The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second

chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
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The
chart
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provides data about how
the
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energy
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is used in
household
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households
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in Australia.
On the other hand
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,
second
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chart
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gives the amount of greenhouse gas which
was emit
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was emitted
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from
energy
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comsumption
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consumption
.
Overall
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, heating,water heating, and other
appliences
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appliances
were the two leading users in each
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.
While
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cooling and lighting were the lowest users
in
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both
side
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sides
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. Looking at the first chat data sets, Australian people used much
energy
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for worming and water heating with 42% and 30%, those are the first and second
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on the
chart
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. 15%
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energy
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used
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is used
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for other appliances. They used
enery
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energy
much less for cooling and lighting with 2% and 4% respectively.
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, 32%
greenhouse
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of greenhouse
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gas emit
form
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from
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Australian
household
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households
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, which is the biggest
than
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other. They created
lot
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of greenhouse gas
form
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from
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heating, lighting,
refrigeration
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and refrigeration
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with 15,8%,and 14% respectively. Cooling was the lowest
form
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from
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both
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chart
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charts
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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