task 1 The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

task 1 

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the line graph
,
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compares
percentage
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the percentage
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of 4 different recycled materials,
paper
and
cardboard
,
glass
containers, aluminium cans and plastics over a 28-year period between 1982 and 2010.
Paper
and
cardboard
got the first rank in the recycling
rate
. after that in the second and third place,
glass
containers and aluminium cans respectively placed
while
with significant gap plastic items took the
last
place. In 1982,
paper
and
cardboard
with approximately 65%
rate
had the
most
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percentage among the others. After 12 years,
paper
and
cardboard
peaked at 80% proportion, but
glass
containers had a fluctuating
rate
, it started
with
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50% and went down but
in
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the end of the 12-year period, it had the same
rate
as it started.
although
paper
recycling showed
downward
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a downward
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trend between 1994 to 2010,
glass
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container
rate
steadily increased. That means
glass
container
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containers
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finished at 60%
while
paper
ended up with 70% of
recycling
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rate
.
In contrast
, the aluminium cans recycling
rate
had
positive
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trend which means started
with
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5% and after 22 years reached 45%, plastic remained relatively steady between 1990 and 2010 with
small
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a small
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increase from 4% to 8%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, glass, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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