task 1 The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the line graph
,
compares Remove the comma
apply
percentage
of 4 different recycled materials, Add an article
the percentage
paper
and cardboard
, glass
containers, aluminium cans and plastics over a 28-year period between 1982 and 2010.
Paper
and cardboard
got the first rank in the recycling rate
. after that in the second and third place, glass
containers and aluminium cans respectively placed while
with significant gap plastic items took the last
place.
In 1982, paper
and cardboard
with approximately 65% rate
had the most
percentage among the others. After 12 years, Correct word choice
highest
paper
and cardboard
peaked at 80% proportion, but glass
containers had a fluctuating rate
, it started with
50% and went down but Change preposition
at
in
the end of the 12-year period, it had the same Change the preposition
at
rate
as it started. although
paper
recycling showed downward
trend between 1994 to 2010, Add an article
a downward
glass
container Correct article usage
the glass
rate
steadily increased. That means glass
container
finished at 60% Fix the agreement mistake
containers
while
paper
ended up with 70% of recycling
Correct article usage
the recycling
rate
.
In contrast
, the aluminium cans recycling rate
had positive
trend which means started Correct article usage
a positive
with
5% and after 22 years reached 45%, plastic remained relatively steady between 1990 and 2010 with Change preposition
at
small
increase from 4% to 8%.Add an article
a small
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, glass, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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