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The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph clearly illustrates the financial assistance provided by four organizations to developing countries across four different years.
Initially
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Organization
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Organizations
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 B and
C
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 had the highest amount compared to other Organizations.
In contrast
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,
Organization
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 A had the lowest amount, with slight differences
besides
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Organization
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 D. At the beginning of the
period
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 in 2008,
Organization
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 B and
Organization
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C
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 had the first place with around 1.5
billion
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dollars
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.
However
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, in 2010
Organization
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 B dramatically increased to 2.5
billion
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 and steadily increased to the end of the
period
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 with 3
billion
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dollars
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.
Organization
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 A began with 0.5
billion
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dollars
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 which gradually increased to 1
billion
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dollars
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 in 2011.
On the other hand
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,
Organization
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C
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 held the largest amount at the start of the
period
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, despite there being a significant drop in 2010,
Organization
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C
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 successfully recovered to 1.5
billion
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at the end
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 of the timeframe.
Organization
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 D started with over 0.5
billion
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dollars
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 and showed a fluctuating trend with no significant rise or fall
although
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 it dropped to under 0.5 by the end of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words organization, c, period, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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