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This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the procedure
of
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for
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 recycling
bottles
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 which are made from
plastic
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.
Overall
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, there are nine steps
for
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 the process, which can be divided
to
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a
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human related
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 steps and
a
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apply
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machine related
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 steps.
First,
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plastic
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bottles
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 are transported, via a truck, to the recycling centre after being
disposed
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disposed of
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 in a recycling bin. After which it is sorted manually
to
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 two groups, those that are in
a
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good condition to be recycled and those that are not.
Next
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The next
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 step in the procedure is that the good-condition
bottles
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 are made to
blocks
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 by compression.
Following
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this
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, an iron machine crushes the
plastic
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 blocks,
the
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 little pieces
resulted
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resulting
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 from
this
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 step are washed in water.
Consequently
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, after being cleaned the
plastic
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 pieces go into another machine that
transform
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 them
to
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plastic
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 pellets which
then
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they
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are heated to form raw materials.
Lastly
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, end products,
such
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 as clothes,
plastic
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bottles
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, and recycled bags, are produced from the
resulted
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 raw materials.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bottles, plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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