This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates the procedure
of
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recycling
bottles
which are made from
plastic
.
Overall
, there are nine steps
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the process, which can be divided
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a
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human related
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steps and
a
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machine related
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steps.
First,
plastic
bottles
are transported, via a truck, to the recycling centre after being
disposed
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in a recycling bin. After which it is sorted manually
to
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two groups, those that are in
a
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good condition to be recycled and those that are not.
Next
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step in the procedure is that the good-condition
bottles
are made to
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by compression.
Following
this
, an iron machine crushes the
plastic
blocks,
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little pieces
resulted
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from
this
step are washed in water.
Consequently
, after being cleaned the
plastic
pieces go into another machine that
transform
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them
to
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plastic
pellets which
then
they
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are heated to form raw materials.
Lastly
, end products,
such
as clothes,
plastic
bottles
, and recycled bags, are produced from the
resulted
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raw materials.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bottles, plastic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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