A lot teenagers want spend time indoors. Do you agree or disagree ?

Because they are wondering
new
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places,
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and environment
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environment
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environments
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due to
teenagers
having
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have
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more energy than
adult
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adults
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.
Teenagers
has
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possion
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possession
. But I prefer spending
time
stay
home
. They'll be able to open the door. When they were
teenagers
starting interested
of
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in
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environment
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the environment
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. They should be
freedom
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free
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.
Teenagers
need
to
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too
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much freedom. They wonder
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about another
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another
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another teenager
other teenagers
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teenagers
or
they
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their
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
Teenagers
want
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have a lot of friends. Of course close friend. Just wanna spending
time
with friends
at
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apply
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indoors.
This
is true they will have fun with classmates.if
teenagers
spending
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time
indoors they'll be doing anything.
For instance
go
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to restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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,
theaters
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or travel. In terms
my
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of my
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opinion I'd rather stay at
home
than go out . It's nice to sit at
home
. Because you can use your
time
effectively
while
sitting at
home
. I do my
favorite
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activities.
For
example
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example,
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Reading 📚,
do
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doing
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challenges for learning,listening to songs 🎵. Painting pictures. I love my
home
.
HOME
is
also
a small homeland .I can easily do my hobby at
home
.
Home
comfortable
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for me. I like
be
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being
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lonely in my house because I engage in my hobby. My hobby is my life.
This
is
mine
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my
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secrets
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life. In
my
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apply
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conclusion
is
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if you
are
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apply
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stay
home
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at home
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your
time
will be useful for you.
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