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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the comparison of the average weekly expenses by households in certain countries between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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,
while
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 families spent most of their
income
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 on food in 1968, their preferences shifted towards leisure after 50 years.
Nevertheless
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, families spent the least percentage of their
income
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 on fuel and power in both given years. In 1968, 35% of familes' weekly
income
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 were spent on food.
In addition
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, housing and clothing and footwear were spent at the same amount, at 10%.
However
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, approximately 7% of
income
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 was spent on fuel and power. Over 50 years, people prioritized most of their
income
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 to spend on leisure, which comprised approximately 22% of their
income
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. During the same period, families spent nearly 20% of their
income
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 on housing, followed by food and transport which accounted for 17% and 14%, respectively.
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, only 4% was spent on personal goods.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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