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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

#bookshop #members #guest #speaker #event #series #talks #people #e-mail
Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing to you because I
heared
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 about the upcoming event to recommend
a public speakers
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a public speaker
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. I suggest
Sama
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the Sama
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 Sisters
whom
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who
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 are
a
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apply
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three sisters all of them are
a
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apply
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fictional
writer
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writers
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 that adults adore,
moreover
, they have a channel that
present
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 their opinion about books. They are located in our city it's not hard to invite them. As they were invited to a meeting
last
 month and it
succeed
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, so as soon as they come to the events it will be known
in
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the
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apply
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world wide
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while
 people from all over the world follow their account.
Concequently
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Consequently
, the sales of books going to increase dramatically. I highly recommend them mainly because they are very funny during
presentation
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presentations
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, so the audience will feel free to participate and
discuse
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discuss
 several topics with them.
Furthermore
, they take pictures with people and post
it
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them
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at
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on
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 their
account
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 which makes individuals more
exited
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excited
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 to attend. I hope my suggestion is beneficial. Your's
faithfully
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, Sara.
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical issues, such as 'heared' instead of 'heard' and 'Your's faithfully' instead of 'Yours faithfully.'
coherence
Ensure that your ideas are clearly organized into paragraphs for better readability. For example, separate the introduction, each main point, and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs.
details
Elaborate a bit more on each main point to fully explain how the speaker will contribute and why others would be interested. This will enhance your task achievement score.
content
The suggestion of the Sama Sisters is relevant and well-explained with specific examples about their popularity and potential impact on the event.
tone
The tone is polite and appropriate for an email to a bookshop, showing good awareness of audience and purpose.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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