People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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is the most crucial part of
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. Some people think that
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have been chosen in their early lives and
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alter their jobs frequently. I
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agree that choosing
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career
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path early
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it
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bings
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more benefits and in
this
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essay
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will discuss the details clearly.
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satisfication
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is
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imperative
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in our life. One of the
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path
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early age is that helps to excel in the chosen
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job
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tricks and technicals easily
due to
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likely to be found by people and can excel
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, research shows that people who
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the same things for some years that
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years they gain more practical
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when they are hiring for the Employers , they
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for the managerial position.
Thus
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which is the top-notch bank in my country,
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10 years
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manager post with the highest
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package . So, those who are in the same
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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