Some people feel that learning a foreign languageis an essential component of a child's education. Others feel that learning a foreign language is often a waste of time that can be better spent on learning technologyand other vocational subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are some
people
who believe learning
foreign
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language
is of no benefit rather it is a waste of time and money. On
contrary
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the contrary
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, I think they are an important part of knowledge and freedom of expression. On the one hand, some may feel like we will never use them in our daily
life
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lives
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and we will never have to encounter foreigners
while
we are in our own nation.
However
,
this
is not always true if we are to travel to foreign countries.
Firstly
, it makes it easy to communicate with foreigners and get various
informations
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information
about the place.
Secondly
, it will clear out misunderstandings between
people
from different places and different native languages .
For instance
:
people
whether from China , India or Africa,
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can interact with each other without hesitation and get to know each other better.
Moreover
, it brings them closer and they can share their culture and lifestyles which
further
broaden
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their mind and brings clarity over other
culture
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cultures
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and values.
Besides
them, it is
also
related to the cognitive enhancement of an individual. Learning is good for
mind
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the mind
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whether it be a foreign
language
or an art. Having limited access and staying within the same linguistic group can be a narrow perspective of
people
because it is not going to lead us to
farther
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destination. It decreases our
brain
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capacity to learn more
as well as
to experience more good things that are out there in the world. In fact,
people
from other countries can
also
come to us and unless they know our
language
, we will never be able to communicate with each other.
Hence
, the Earth will be a place of mystery. In conclusion, I feel like we should often travel time and again and explore many multi-diverse places and their
habitants
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habitats
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.
Therefore
, it is crucial to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
. Sometimes, there might be a necessity too
either
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whether
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it be
a
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work related
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or
academically
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too.
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