You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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This

diagram illustrates

the carbonated drinks process

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the process of the carbonated drink

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. The manufacturing process

obtaines

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obtained

obtains

five stages of making carbonated

water

Overall

Correct word choice

apply

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it can be seen that, the making of carbonated

water

is starting

Wrong verb form

starts

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from

cleaning

Correct article usage

the cleaning

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step and

end

Correct subject-verb agreement

ends

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Change preposition

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packaging

Correct article usage

the packaging

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stap

Correct your spelling

stage

. Looking at the diagram in more

details

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detail

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to begin

with

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with,

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raw

water

is filtering through

water

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a water

the water

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softener.

This

water

softener contains chemicals for

best

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the best

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cleaning. After that, filtered

water

pumping

Wrong verb form

pumped

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to electric heaters and

deliver

Wrong verb form

delivered

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Correct article usage

the next

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stage

. The second

stage

is heating evaporation and carbonation which is cooling the heating

water

through

cooling

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the cooling

a cooling

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pipe and mixing

with

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it with

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carbon

dioxode

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dioxide

Furthermore

, carbonated

water

mixing

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mixed

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repeatedly in the tank with more colouring materials, syrup and

falvour

Correct your spelling

flavour

. The fourth

stage

is filtering and filling the carbonated

water

bottels

Correct your spelling

bottles

and cons. The final

stage

this

process is when packaging and

send

Wrong verb form

sending

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carbonated

water

products to

supermarket

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supermarkets

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. So, customers can be

drinked

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drunk

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after getting a good cooling.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

156 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

carbonated drinks
water cleaning
heating evaporation
carbonation
mixing tank
filtering
filling
packaging
raw water
filtration
softening
chemical treatment
heating
evaporated
carbon dioxide
coloring
sweeteners
flavorings
final beverage
impurities
bottles and cans
distributed
supermarkets
stores

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Today family members eat fewer meals together. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘ one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Some people think there is no need for professional photographers as everybody knows how to click pictures. What is your opinion? Include any relevant personal experience and knowledge