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The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of young
people
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, with regard to four types of countermeasures chosen to deal with the global warming in Portugal,
Poland
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,
Romania
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 and
Holand
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 in 2008.
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the Most
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 proportion of
four
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the four
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 solutions taken took place
in
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young
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the young
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 generation in Portugal, followed by
Poland
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,
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Holand
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Holland
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 and
Romania
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.
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While most
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people
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 in Portugal choose life style to deal with environmental
problem
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, following
with
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apply
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government regulations,
advanced
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and advanced
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 technology. Looking at the information in more detail, second only to Portugal with
figure
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about
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 40%, the
major part
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majority
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 of
people
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 (30% ) in
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holand
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Holand
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 preferred using advanced technology, equal to the rate of
people
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 in
Holand
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 and Portugal not choosing these methods, followed with
Romania
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 (20%) and
Poland
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(10%). 20%
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people
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of people
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 in
Romania
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 had faith in Government Regulation, slightly higher than
people
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 in
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Holand
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Holland
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 (10%), but it is surpassed by Portugal (40%) and Portugal (30%). Approximately 25%
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people
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of people
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 in
Poland
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 changed their
life style
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lifestyle
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 to make efforts, compared with almost 45%
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people
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of people
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 in Portugal
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who did
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did
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in
this
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 way,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 nearly 13%
young
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of young
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people
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 in
Romania
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 and
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Holand
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Holland
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 followed
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 method.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, poland, romania, holand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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