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The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart presents data about
proportion
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the proportion
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 of young
people
, with regard to four types of countermeasures chosen to deal with the global warming in Portugal,
Poland
,
Romania
 and
Holand
 in 2008.
Overall
,
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the Most
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 proportion of
four
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the four
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 solutions taken took place
in
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by
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young
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the young
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 generation in Portugal, followed by
Poland
,
Holand
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Holland
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 and
Romania
.
While most
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Most
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people
 in Portugal choose life style to deal with environmental
problem
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problems
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, following
with
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apply
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government regulations,
advanced
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and advanced
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 technology. Looking at the information in more detail, second only to Portugal with
figure
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about
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 40%, the
major part
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majority
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 of
people
 (30% ) in
holand
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Holand
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 preferred using advanced technology, equal to the rate of
people
 in
Holand
 and Portugal not choosing these methods, followed with
Romania
 (20%) and
Poland
(10%). 20%
people
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of people
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 in
Romania
 had faith in Government Regulation, slightly higher than
people
 in
Holand
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Holland
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 (10%), but it is surpassed by Portugal (40%) and Portugal (30%). Approximately 25%
people
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of people
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 in
Poland
 changed their
life style
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lifestyle
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 to make efforts, compared with almost 45%
people
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of people
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 in Portugal
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who did
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did
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in
this
 way,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 nearly 13%
young
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of young
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people
 in
Romania
 and
Holand
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Holland
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 followed
this
 method.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, poland, romania, holand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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