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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030
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The graph below compares the general number of people in
UK
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the UK
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traveling
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travelling
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 daily by car, bus and train over the period of 60 years. It can be concluded from the graph that the amount of UK residents
traveling
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travelling
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 by train and car grew moderately and is predicted to see a significant increase by the end of the period.
While
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 commuters traveling by bus are expected to decline
consequently
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 becoming the least popular means of transport. In 1970 around 5
million
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 of the population used cars as their main way to get around,
while
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 public transport was less popular with only 3
million
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 and 2
million
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persons
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people
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 respectively. In 2000 the figure
of
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for
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 those using cars grew considerably up to 7
million
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 people. It can
also
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 be evident that
the
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apply
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public transport had
equal
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an equal
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 amount of passengers between 2010 and 2020 with more than 3
million
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 commuters.
However
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, in the future both
car
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cars
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 and
train
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trains
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 are predicted to continue their upward trend by 2030 reaching
the
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a
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 peak at 9
million
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 and around 5
million
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, meanwhile, the number of bus passengers will continue falling.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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