The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day

by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030
The graph below compares the general number of people in
UK
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traveling
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travelling
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daily by car, bus and train over the period of 60 years. It can be concluded from the graph that the amount of UK residents
traveling
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travelling
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by train and car grew moderately and is predicted to see a significant increase by the end of the period.
While
commuters traveling by bus are expected to decline
consequently
becoming the least popular means of transport. In 1970 around 5
million
of the population used cars as their main way to get around,
while
public transport was less popular with only 3
million
and 2
million
persons
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people
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respectively. In 2000 the figure
of
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those using cars grew considerably up to 7
million
people. It can
also
be evident that
the
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public transport had
equal
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amount of passengers between 2010 and 2020 with more than 3
million
commuters.
However
, in the future both
car
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cars
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and
train
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trains
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are predicted to continue their upward trend by 2030 reaching
the
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a
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peak at 9
million
and around 5
million
, meanwhile, the number of bus passengers will continue falling.
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