The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.

The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.
The two given charts illustrate information about the proportions of people who own electrical apparatus
as well as
the amount of time dedicated
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chores per week in an average home between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, the number of households that own electrical appliances grew significantly, as there was a drastic increase in the ownership proportions of all appliances.
Conversely
, the duration of time allocated for housework has declined. Looking at the data about appliance ownership with more depth, the graph illustrates the rates of three devices, namely, the washing machine, the refrigerator, and the vacuum cleaner. All three categories illustrated a significant surge. The highest growth was demonstrated by the refrigerator, as it grew from just over 1% of households to 100% in 40 years, and
this
rate was maintained till 2019. The second-highest increase was displayed by the vacuum cleaner which grew steadily from 30% to 100% over a period of 80 years and maintained it.
Furthermore
, the washing machine
also
underwent a growth of 30%, but it is noteworthy that it experienced a slight decline between 1960 and 1980. Bearing in mind that the other two devices not only maintained a steady increase
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but
also
reached the maximum limit which the washing machine failed to achieve.
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the data about the time dedicated
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chores, the number of hours experienced a significant decrease, falling from 50 hours per week in 1920, to just over 10 hours weekly in 2019.
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