the charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie chart illustrates the location of
dance
classes
and the bar graph demonstrates the types of
dance
classes
based on attendees' age.
Overall
, it is evident that private
studios
account for the highest proportion of location of
dance
classes
,
also
the lowest one belongs to college-based
studios
.
However
, ballet
dance
is popular among
students
who are under 11,
students
between 11 and 16 are more inclined to go to modern
dance
classes
. Given the pie chart, private
studios
are considered the highest number of class locations at about 48%.
Also
, after private
studios
, school halls are the second most popular place for enforcing
classes
with nearly 24%.
Furthermore
, community halls and others with low differences stand at the third at 18%. The lowest percentage goes for college-based
studios
with approximately 10%. The biggest number of participants in ballet class belonged to
students
who are under 11 (just under 600 members) approximately twofold of
students
with ages between 11 and 16 (300 members).
By contrast
, in modern
dance
classes
,
students
with age between 11 and 16 are
also
more enthusiastic about attending
this
style of
dance
class with nearly 520
students
.
Additionally
, as can be seen, tap
dance
is truly popular in under 11 age group.
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  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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