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the charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided pie chart illustrates the location of
dance
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classes
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 and the bar graph demonstrates the types of
dance
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classes
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 based on attendees' age.
Overall
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, it is evident that private
studios
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 account for the highest proportion of location of
dance
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classes
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,
also
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 the lowest one belongs to college-based
studios
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.
However
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, ballet
dance
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 is popular among
students
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 who are under 11,
students
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 between 11 and 16 are more inclined to go to modern
dance
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classes
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. Given the pie chart, private
studios
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 are considered the highest number of class locations at about 48%.
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, after private
studios
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, school halls are the second most popular place for enforcing
classes
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 with nearly 24%.
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, community halls and others with low differences stand at the third at 18%. The lowest percentage goes for college-based
studios
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 with approximately 10%. The biggest number of participants in ballet class belonged to
students
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 who are under 11 (just under 600 members) approximately twofold of
students
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 with ages between 11 and 16 (300 members).
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, in modern
dance
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classes
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,
students
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 with age between 11 and 16 are
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 more enthusiastic about attending
this
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 style of
dance
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 class with nearly 520
students
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.
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, as can be seen, tap
dance
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 is truly popular in under 11 age group.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, studios, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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