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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting an reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the inforamtion by selecting an reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The figure depicts the floor layout of Central Library 20 years ago and the new diagram shows new changes.
Overall
, many sections
in
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this
 floor
is
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have
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 completely changed from the names of parts to
shapes
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the shapes
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 of the sections and some changes in the main hall.
To begin
 with, if we divide
this
map
 into three segments, on the left side of the
map
, there
was
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were
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 CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games section at the left top of the
map
 in the past in comparison with
computer
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the computer
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 room
is
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in
left
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the left
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 bottom of the diagram. The Adult fiction
books
is
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are
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 changed to all reference
books
 and it is narrower than before.
According to
this
, at present, on the left top of the layout, there
is
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are
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 Children’s fiction
books
 with
large
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a large
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 space
that
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where
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 people go
there
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and tell some stories to their children.
Also
, there are two sofas in
this
 place. In the middle of the
map
, two tables and 16 chairs are removed to have more spacious space in
main
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 hall. On the right side of the
map
, the Children’s
books
 which
was
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were
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 at the
right
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apply
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top of the diagram
is
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are
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 replaced
to
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lecture
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the lecture
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 room. On the right bottom of the present figure, there is a Café,
whereas
 the was the Enquiry desk in the past.
And eventually
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, in the middle, the Adult non-fiction
books
 section is changed large space with different parts
such
 as Adult fiction
books
,
Information
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an Information
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 desk, and Self-service machines.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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