You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The charts shown
to
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illustrate the
number
of students enrolled in several courses
such
as drama, painting, sculpture, and
language
in regard
of
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gender and age in 2009.
Overall
, the
number
of women
win
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over the men
on
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almost all classes, with the majority of people in their elderly. Focusing on the courses, in order of popularity,
language
class
topped the chart
in
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total
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a total
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of 60 participants. Following that are painting
class
, drama
class
, and sculpture
class
with
number
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a number
the number
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of students
are
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55, 30, and 15, respectively. Another thing to note is that you would find women with ease in the majority of the courses, especially
on
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language
and drama
course
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courses
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which have the amount doubled the
number
of men. Except for the sculpture course, in which you will find the opposite of the aforementioned situation. Based on age, the majority of the course-takers are in their 50s or over. It
seemed
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that you can find adults easily
on
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any
class
, rather than
teenager
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teenagers
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under 20 years old.
Also
, as the age increased, the more they
are
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wiling
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willing
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to participate
on
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these classes. So, we can conclude that the most popular evening course in 2009
is
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was
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language
class
, which
mostly
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was mostly
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entered by adults starting from 40 years old and over.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, language, class with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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