In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
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solution
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pressure on them as they need to paid
for their children education.
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task achievement
Your essay covers relevant points related to anxiety and its causes but lacks focus on the actual topic of driverless vehicles. Make sure to stay on topic.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have made an effort to identify problems and suggest solutions, which is good analytical thinking.
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