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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The provided line graph gives information on the percentage of the
population
 in urban areas in four different Asian countries, namely
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the Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
,
Malaysia
, Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020, with
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a prediction
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prediction
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predictions
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to
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for
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next
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the next
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 decade from 2030 and 2040. The units are measured in the per cent. Generally speaking, it is evident that in the past Philippines city citizens comprised the highest point at 50%,
while
 it has
predicted
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been predicted
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 that
Malaysia
 will reach the vertex at approximately 85% of individuals who will live in
cities
. First and foremost, it is noticeable that in 1980 only half of
population
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the population
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 of all countries
,
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 lived in metropolitan areas rather
that
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than
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 in suburbs. In 2000, inhabitants of Thailand and Indonesia, who lived in contemporary, urban areas plateaued at 30%,
while
Ohilippines
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Philippines
 comprised nearly 45%.
Additionally
,
Malaysia
 skyrocketed at 60% of individuals who
were
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lived in the
cities
. With regards to the future predictions,in 2040 in all given countries the total
population
 of the people, who live in urban
cities
 will face an upward tendency.
Moreover
, Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 will comprise 45% and 50%, respectively. Notwithstanding of downward tendency that has
been occured
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occurred
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 in
the
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apply
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Indonesia it
has
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is
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 predicted that it will rise to 60%.
Furthermore
,
Malaysia
 will face
an
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overwhelming
improvements
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improvement
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 with 80% of
population
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the population
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, who live in the
cities
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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