Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living In an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the other hand some of them
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that ranting gives them more
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more advantages than disadvantages of living in a
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having an apartment could make you move from place to another as well it is
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Spacious
  • Privacy
  • Customization
  • Equity
  • Neighborhood
  • Community
  • Driveway
  • Garages
  • Long-term investment
  • Landscaping
  • Renovate
  • Property value
  • Quiet environment
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