International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? General topic - International tourism Specific topic - impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Advantages - cover labour-shortages and create business Disadvantages - pollution and jobs competition rises

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International
tourism
brings many benefits to different nations but others argue that it shows
impact
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the impact
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on local inhabitants and the
environment
.I believe that
tourism
has more advantages than disadvantages.
Although
tourism
shows
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bad
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a bad
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affect
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on the
environment
and
impact
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on local life , It is
also
beleive
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believed
believe
that it helps to cover
labour-shortages
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labour shortages
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as well as
provide business
opportunities
to locals. The main
disadvantages
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of
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tourism
is that bad
impact
on the
environment
and local
people
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lives.
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when
people
travel to
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other countries
then
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strain
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on
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natural resources because more amount of fuel is used to travel to different nations
thus
tourism
leads to the depletion of essential fossil fuels.
Second,
it
also
shows
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the affect
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affect
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on local's lives .Tourist places are generally more expensive and increase their rates with
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more
persons
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coming inside the country.
However
,
this
also
impact
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the local
people
because they find it hard to afford it.
For instance
, in Canada, the housing property rate is high
due to
more travellers coming in and buying the property .
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, it makes
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for local
people
to buy the house at affordable
rate
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rates
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.
However
, it is
inevitable
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true that
tourism
covers
that
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labour-shortage
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labour shortage
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in the job market and
also
create
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employment
opportunities
for
people
. The main advantages of
the
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toursim
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tourism
is
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that it covers the
labour-shortage
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labour shortage
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and
also
provide
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employment
opportunities
to the
people
.
First,
In many parts of the world , when
people
travel to different nations they would like to explore
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employment
opportunities
,and eventually find
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jobs
according to
their
requirement
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requirements
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,
and
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helps in fulfilling
labour-shortages
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labour shortages
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in the job sector. Another benefit is
that
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creating
employment
opportunities
for locals .
For example
, in Canada , many tourists open up new
business
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businesses
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like restaurants for helping in reduction of unemployment rate.
Therefore
,
toursim
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tourism
brings far more advantages than disadvantages. In conclusion , there is a debate that
tourism
brings benefits and at the same time it
also
show
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shows
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affects
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effects
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on local lives and the
environment
.I believe that
this
movement shows more benefits because it
cover
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covers
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labour shortage in the jobs and
provide
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provides
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employment
opportunities
to locals.
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Work on detailed examples within the main points to strengthen arguments. Use specific data or anecdotes where possible.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the consistency in verb tenses and subject-verb agreement to improve clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next. Use linking words and phrases effectively to maintain a strong flow.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly stated, setting up and summarizing the essay’s arguments well.
task achievement
The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of international tourism, showing a balanced argument.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is good, with clear main points and supporting details.

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