International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? General topic - International tourism Specific topic - impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Advantages - cover labour-shortages and create business Disadvantages - pollution and jobs competition rises

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the local
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employment
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creating
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labour shortage in the jobs and
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