The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.

The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.
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information about the percentage
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household's
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with electrical appliances from the year 1920 to 2019. In 1960 the percentage of
the
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refrigerator
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was at its peak at around 90
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.In 1920 the highest electrical
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was
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washing
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machines
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with the start of 40
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and the least being
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refrigerators
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. In the year
2019
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both the vacuum cleaner and the refrigerator were at the same level of 100
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as the highest as compared to
washing
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machine which was at almost 70
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at the time. In summary, the graph is informative.
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