The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been a passionate argument about
people
think
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that the
government
should provide them with free transport because of
traffic
, I actually agree with
this
statement because
of
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the
government
do
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does
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not try to solve the roads. In
this
essay, I will talk about the social situation and
also
I will discuss many solutions.
First,
why do I think that we need free transportation is because
of
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we can not do our daily
requirement
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requirements
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easily.
For example
, if we need to go to
supermarket
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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that is
near to us we need like 20 minutes just by car because of
traffic
.
In addition
, there are many solutions like,
make
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the road bigger or
offer
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people
a bicycle to make the road shorter. On the other side.
People
like me want to go to their schools but we need to wake up early just to avoid the
traffic
, it becomes a disaster you need to do everything before the
traffic
begin
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or you will need to deal with it.
Furthermore
, the
government
should start
from
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now to plan for
this
tragedy by offering
24 hours
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24-hour
free
taxi
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,
also
, they need to make a train to let
people
on different vehicles. In conclusion. In my point of view, I think the
government
should start to develop any idea to solve
this
enormous problem or use my solutions,
also
, I actually agree that they should give us
a
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24 hours a day
for
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per
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week free transportation because they do not even try to solve
this
huge problem.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion which is good. However, the connection between ideas needs improvement. Try to ensure a clear logical structure by connecting concepts more fluidly.
task achievement
While you provide some points in favor of free public transport, your arguments could be more comprehensive and better supported with specific examples. Discuss alternative solutions more thoroughly.
writing quality
There are several grammatical mistakes and awkward phrases. Review grammar rules and consider practicing with simpler sentences initially. For instance, change 'we can not do our daily requirement easily' to 'we cannot complete our daily tasks easily.'
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, giving your essay a sense of completeness.
task achievement
The topic is relevant and you have attempted to provide solutions, showing a good understanding of the task.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates engagement with the topic and presents some valid concerns and solutions.

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