The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport 24 hours a day, seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, there has been a passionate argument about
people
think
that the Wrong verb form
thinking
government
should provide them with free transport because of traffic
, I actually agree with this
statement because of
the Change preposition
apply
government
do
not try to solve the roads. In Correct subject-verb agreement
does
this
essay, I will talk about the social situation and also
I will discuss many solutions.
First,
why do I think that we need free transportation is because of
we can not do our daily Change preposition
apply
requirement
easily. Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
For example
, if we need to go to supermarket
Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
that is
near to us we need like 20 minutes just by car because of traffic
. In addition
, there are many solutions like, make
the road bigger or Wrong verb form
making
offer
Wrong verb form
offering
people
a bicycle to make the road shorter.
On the other side. People
like me want to go to their schools but we need to wake up early just to avoid the traffic
, it becomes a disaster you need to do everything before the traffic
begin
or you will need to deal with it. Correct subject-verb agreement
begins
Furthermore
, the government
should start from
now to plan for Change preposition
apply
this
tragedy by offering 24 hours
free Correct your spelling
24-hour
taxi
, Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
also
, they need to make a train to let people
on different vehicles.
In conclusion. In my point of view, I think the government
should start to develop any idea to solve this
enormous problem or use my solutions, also
, I actually agree that they should give us a
24 hours a day Correct article usage
apply
for
week free transportation because they do not even try to solve Change preposition
per
this
huge problem.Submitted by bcynfn159 on
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion which is good. However, the connection between ideas needs improvement. Try to ensure a clear logical structure by connecting concepts more fluidly.
task achievement
While you provide some points in favor of free public transport, your arguments could be more comprehensive and better supported with specific examples. Discuss alternative solutions more thoroughly.
writing quality
There are several grammatical mistakes and awkward phrases. Review grammar rules and consider practicing with simpler sentences initially. For instance, change 'we can not do our daily requirement easily' to 'we cannot complete our daily tasks easily.'
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, giving your essay a sense of completeness.
task achievement
The topic is relevant and you have attempted to provide solutions, showing a good understanding of the task.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates engagement with the topic and presents some valid concerns and solutions.