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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Write a report for University describing the information shown below. Make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Write a report for University describing the information shown below. Make comparison where relevant.
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The provided data illustrate the buyer spending their
money
 on various items in five nations during the period of 2002.
To begin
 with,
Turkey
 is the first
country
 who spent
higher
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more
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money
 on food,
drink
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and drink
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 and
Tabacco
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Tobacco
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 and Ireland came
on
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in
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second
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the second
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 number. For the former, 32.14% and for the latter 28.91%.
However
, Sweden
is
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only spent 15.77% on
foodm
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food
 drink and Tabacco which is almost 1% and 3% less
then
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than
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 Spain and Italy respectively.
Secondly
, Ireland, Spain and
Turkey
 are countries that spent on clothing and footwear under approx 6% to 7%. Italy
buyer
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buyers
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 spent 9% and Sweden
consumer
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consumers
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 spent 5.40% on clothing and footwear.In
contrary
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contrast
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, each
country
 spent 1% to 5% of their
money
 on leisure and education. In leisure and Education
Turkey
 is
on
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in
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first
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the first
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 number with 4.35% and Spain
on
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apply
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last
 with 1.98 %.
Overall
, Each
country
 has
theirn
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its
 different
prefers
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preferences
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, but almost
Turkey
 is the only
country
who
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that
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 spent
most
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the most
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money
in
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on
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 all these expenses.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, turkey, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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