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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the next generation, all vehicles including cars, buses and trucks will be
driveless
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driverless
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 and these kinds of transportation modes will only
fulfil
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 by passengers. I believe that it is more
beneficials
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beneficial
 outweigh the disadvantages.
Benefit
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Benefits
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 from
driveless
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driverless
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 can be various from
companies
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into
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individuals
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. The invention of driverless will reduce operational costs
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 there is no need to spend more money
for
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 paying drivers and it eventually ends in lowering tickets particularly regarding
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public transportation.
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, a firm which
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 buses
have
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 to pay
cost
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for
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of
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maintence
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maintenance
, solar and drivers. If they can drive their vehicles without drivers, it means their expenditure will be minimized and they can lower the tickets for passengers
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also
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 get more
revenues
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.
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, in terms of individuals, it will increase
productivity
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 of owners. Ownership of cars can do other kinds of activities when they are on the road.
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, employees can complete tasks on the road and rely on
automatic
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 driver system to drive their cars.
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,
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phenomena
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 might result in increasing incidents.
System
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Systems
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 in vehicles may be wrong when
taking
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making
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 decisions and it leads to an accident. On traffic
jump
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jumps
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,
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, sophisticated technology might be inaccurate in
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calculating
 the distance for each car or
speed
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the speed
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 of
car
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the car
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. Because of
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 limitation, it can cause several accidents like a car
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 a traffic light or another vehicle. Even though there is a risk of disfunction of machines,
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apply
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this
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 condition can
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 by improving the operational system.
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, I believe that in the future, experts will solve
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 problem. In conclusion, I fully support the development of driverless because it will reduce
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costs
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 and increase the
eficiency
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efficiency
 of a person. One of the most considerable for
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 invention is potential risk
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 lack of predicting traffic situation but I believe that it will be fixed by professionals.

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task achievement
The essay addresses the question and attempts to provide a balanced view. However, it would benefit from more detailed examples and elaboration on the points made. Try to include more specific instances to support your arguments.
language
There are some grammar and vocabulary errors present, such as 'driveless' instead of 'driverless', 'solar' instead of 'fuel', and 'traffic jump' instead of 'traffic jam'. It would strengthen the essay to proofread for such errors or use synonyms where appropriate.
coherence cohesion
While the essay is structured reasonably well with separate paragraphs for different points, the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Use more cohesive devices and linking words to ensure a more natural flow from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion succinctly wraps up the essay, but it could be enhanced by summarizing the main points in a clearer manner. Also, try to address both sides of the argument more evenly throughout the essay before concluding.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction presents the topic clearly and establishes the writer's position on the issue effectively.
supported main points
The main points raised in the body paragraphs are pertinent and relevant to the topic.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion reinforces the viewpoint expressed in the introduction and provides a sense of closure to the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • road accidents
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • fuel efficiency
  • mobility
  • economic impact
  • job displacement
  • technical challenges
  • reliability
  • security
  • ethical concerns
  • legal issues
  • programming algorithms
  • decision-making
  • liability
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