In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In recent times, some people
staying
alone by their choice than past generations. Living alone makes them responsible, Wrong verb form
have stayed
punctual
and Correct word choice
and punctual
give
Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
great
experience Correct pronoun usage
them great
to tackle
any problems. It is a positive development in their life and Change preposition
in tackling
i
shall Change the capitalization
I
in
favour of Add a missing verb
be in
positive
side and give relevant examples to support my Correct article usage
the positive
view points
.
In commencing with foremost positive Correct your spelling
viewpoints
thought
, living alone makes them independent. Fix the agreement mistake
thoughts
Peoppe
Correct your spelling
People
having
hectic schedules and for Wrong verb form
have
good
education and Correct article usage
a good
better
Add an article
a better
career
, they lived
alone which makes them responsible and supportive to do new things in their life. Wrong verb form
live
Fir
instance, Correct your spelling
For
india
government Replace the word
the Indian
conduct
a survey and Wrong verb form
conducted
tgey
found Correct your spelling
they
80
% Correct word choice
that 80
youngsters
lived alone to support their Change preposition
of youngsters
family
Fix the agreement mistake
families
as well as
better qualifications. It is clear that
away from family person
are more independent.
Fix the agreement mistake
people
On the other hand
, they gain good qualification
and better living standards. For qualification and Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
career
opportunities usually graduates lived
away from family to make their Wrong verb form
live
career
and took
the family responsibilities. Wrong verb form
take
These
behaviour makes them more social and responsible and Correct determiner usage
This
teach
them respect for others. A study conducted by Change the verb form
teaches
indian
researchers Change the capitalization
Indian
which
shows 20-35 Correct pronoun usage
apply
aged
group of participants Replace the word
age
took
Verb problem
made
Correct article usage
the decisions
decisions
to stay away from home for several reasons and got more positive results in their later Fix the agreement mistake
decision
life
.
In conclusion, living with family Fix the agreement mistake
lives
having
more positive aspects like independence, responsibility and Wrong verb form
has
career
growth but negative aspects ignorable like up
and Replace the word
ups
down
in struggle time.Replace the word
downs
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grammar
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. For example, replace 'some people staying alone by their choice than past generations' with 'some people choosing to live alone compared to past generations.'
development
Develop paragraphs more fully by providing more detailed explanations and examples. For instance, elaborate on why living alone makes individuals more responsible and independent.
task response
The essay clearly addresses the task by discussing whether living alone is a positive or negative development, offering arguments and examples to support the view that it is positive.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which effectively frame the discussion.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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