The chart show percentages of water used in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.
The pie chart shows percentages of
water
utilised in different ways in Sydney and Australia between 1997 and 2007.
Overall
, on both sides, the food industry
required more water
than other sectors, and less water
was used in the building industry
.
Percentage of total water
use
in 1997: in the food industry
, 48% of water
is used and 19% of water
is used for households. Manufacturing and service industries are similar to each other; they are 15% and 12%. Less water
is used in the building industry
. It was 5% in 1997.
Turning to the
Correct article usage
apply
water
use
in 2007, people made use
of more water
in the food industry
; it is 41%. For the service industry
, they used 25%, as well as
for household use
, which is 21%. 11% of water
is utilised for manufacturing, and the less
one is the building Replace the word
least
industry
, with 2% of water
used for it.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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