The chart show percentages of water used in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.

The chart show percentages of water used in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007.
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The pie chart shows percentages of
water
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utilised in different ways in Sydney and Australia between 1997 and 2007.  
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, on both sides, the food
industry
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required more
water
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than other sectors, and less
water
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was used in the building
industry
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.   Percentage of total
water
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use
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in 1997: in the food
industry
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, 48% of
water
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is used and 19% of
water
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is used for households. Manufacturing and service industries are similar to each other; they are 15% and 12%. Less
water
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is used in the building
industry
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. It was 5% in 1997.   Turning to
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water
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use
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in 2007, people made
use
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of more
water
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in the food
industry
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; it is 41%. For the service
industry
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, they used 25%,
as well as
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for household
use
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, which is 21%. 11% of
water
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is utilised for manufacturing, and the
less
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one is the building
industry
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, with 2% of
water
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used for it.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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