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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The maps illustrate the developments which took place in
harbour
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the harbour
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 between 2000
until
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and
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 today.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation over
these
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the
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 years.
it is clear that
,
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 public
beach
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beaches
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was
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were
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 the same
among
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during
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 these years On the west
side
 of the harbour, to the south of
this
, the main entrance of car parking converted from
side
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a side
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 road into the main road
instead
. During these years showers and toilets to the south
was
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 demolished. The most noticeable is that
large
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the large
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 fishing boat was replaced by
Marine
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the Marine
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 and
fishing
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a fishing
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 boat was established
into
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on
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 the north
side
. Looking
at
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to
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 the east, construction for
a
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apply
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cafes and shops to the south
side
to
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of
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lifeboat
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the lifeboat
a lifeboat
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.
Castle
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The castle
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being
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was
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 demolished to make way for
hotel
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a hotel
the hotel
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 which led to
convert
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converting
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 the privet beach to be for hotel residents only.
Further
 development was the construction of
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an additionally
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additionally
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additional
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 dock to the north of the harbour with the same space.
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coherence cohesion
Your response is fairly well-organized, but the structure could be improved for better clarity. Consider having a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion.
task achievement
You have included many of the main features and made comparisons, but some points might be a little unclear. Try to ensure each point is clearly explained and well-supported.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear logical flow. For instance, you could describe all changes on the west side of the harbour first and then move to the east side.
task achievement
You have appropriately described the major changes that have taken place in the harbour.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical sequence in presenting the information.
task achievement
You made an effort to include specific details about the changes (e.g., the addition of a hotel, the transformation of the car parking), which enriches your description.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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