Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Task 1. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Task 1.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved

to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The line graphs illustrate the
number
of people moving to the main
citiy
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city
in
certain
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a certain
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country, categorized by the
reason
for
this
action including employment, study, family/friends and
adventure
.
Overall
, it is clear the
number
of people moving to urban
area
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areas
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for
persuing
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pursuing
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career
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careers
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had dominate
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others. Many individuals came to study was relatively low at the start, it increased
substantialy
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substantially
to the same as employment in the
end
.
While
those who needed to live with
friend
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friends
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and went
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on adventure
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adventure
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adventures
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in the city had the lowest
number
. In 2000, those who went to
capital
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the capital
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city for
job
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the job
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had the
greastest
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greatest
number
at approximately 60,000. The
figure
rose consistently to reach its peak by 2010, with above 90,000 before
experienced
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a
dropped
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to roughly 8,700. The
number
of people
allocating
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allocated
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for
edcation
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education
had
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was
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the
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relatively lower at 20,000
initailly
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initially
, it
suged
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rose
rapidly to the same
number
of
the
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job
figure
at the
end
of
given
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a given
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period.
In contrast
,
family
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reason
figure
began at above 10,000 in 2000, followed by a gradual increase between 2005 and 2010,
then
remained flatted at above 20,000 the
last
five years.
While
,
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those who preferred
adventure
started at the lowest point as family
figure
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figures
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but had a stable minimal incline throughout the 15 period years. In summary, both
number
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the number
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of
carrer
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careers
and study reasons had the same highest
number
at the
end
, but
education
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the education
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reason
began with
lower
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a lower
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number
.
While
Family/
freind
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friends
and
adventure
reasons started at the lowest point,
additionally
experiencing minimal incline, family
reason
had
higher
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the higher
a higher
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number
at the
end
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, reason, adventure, end, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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