Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this   The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the
number
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of people moving to the main
citiy
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city
in
certain
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a certain
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country, categorized by the
reason
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for
this
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action including employment, study, family/friends and
adventure
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.
Overall
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, it is clear the
number
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of people moving to urban
area
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areas
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for
persuing
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pursuing
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career
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had dominate
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others. Many individuals came to study was relatively low at the start, it increased
substantialy
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substantially
to the same as employment in the
end
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.
While
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those who needed to live with
friend
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friends
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and went
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on adventure
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adventure
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adventures
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in the city had the lowest
number
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. In 2000, those who went to
capital
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the capital
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city for
job
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the job
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had the
greastest
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greatest
number
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at approximately 60,000. The
figure
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rose consistently to reach its peak by 2010, with above 90,000 before
experienced
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a
dropped
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to roughly 8,700. The
number
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of people
allocating
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for
edcation
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education
had
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was
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the
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apply
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relatively lower at 20,000
initailly
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initially
, it
suged
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rose
rapidly to the same
number
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of
the
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apply
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job
figure
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at the
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end
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of
given
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a given
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period.
In contrast
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,
family
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the family
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reason
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figure
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began at above 10,000 in 2000, followed by a gradual increase between 2005 and 2010,
then
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remained flatted at above 20,000 the
last
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five years.
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,
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those who preferred
adventure
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started at the lowest point as family
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figure
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figures
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but had a stable minimal incline throughout the 15 period years. In summary, both
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number
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the number
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of
carrer
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careers
and study reasons had the same highest
number
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at the
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end
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, but
education
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the education
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reason
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began with
lower
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a lower
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number
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.
While
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Family/
freind
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friends
and
adventure
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reasons started at the lowest point,
additionally
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experiencing minimal incline, family
reason
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had
higher
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the higher
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number
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at the
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end
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, reason, adventure, end, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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