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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates how much
time
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 4 groups of people of different nationalities (
Chinese
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, American,
Turkish
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 and Brazilian ) allocated their
time
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 between 3 activities during their day-offs in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
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,
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Chinese
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the Chinese
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 spent most of their
time
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on
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reading out of all nationalities,
while
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Brazilians
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 were mostly on the beach. Both Americans and
Turkish
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 were devoting their
time
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on
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to
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 each type of
activities
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activity
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 evenly; they both shared first place in visiting places. With
the
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regards to
Chinese
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, they spent 8
hours
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on
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reading books,
while
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Brazilians
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 spent half of
this
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time
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 on the
exactly
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exact
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 same activity.
Brazilians
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 preferred to be at the beach for 6
hours
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,
however
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, for
Chinese
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 it was twice less (3
hours
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).
Chinese
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 devoted 1 hour of their spare
time
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on
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to
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 visiting places at the same
time
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 for
Brazilians
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 2
hours
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 was sufficient. Comparing American and
Turkish
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 visitors in terms of visiting
beach
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beaches
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, they dedicated 4
hours
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 and 5
hours
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 respectively. Americans represented themselves as true book lovers in comparison with
Turkish
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 people, by dedicating 1 hour more
for
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to
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 reading books.
However
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, in visiting
places
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places,
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 they were even by both allocating 3
hours
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 for
this
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 activity.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, chinese, turkish, brazilians, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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