The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The bar chart illustrates how much
time
4 groups of people of different nationalities ( Chinese
, American, Turkish
and Brazilian ) allocated their time
between 3 activities during their day-offs in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
, Chinese
spent most of their Correct article usage
the Chinese
time
on
reading out of all nationalities, Change preposition
apply
while
Brazilians
were mostly on the beach. Both Americans and Turkish
were devoting their time
on
each type of Change preposition
to
activities
evenly; they both shared first place in visiting places.
With Fix the agreement mistake
activity
the
regards to Correct article usage
apply
Chinese
, they spent 8 hours
on
reading books, Change preposition
apply
while
Brazilians
spent half of this
time
on the exactly
same activity. Replace the word
exact
Brazilians
preferred to be at the beach for 6 hours
, however
, for Chinese
it was twice less (3 hours
). Chinese
devoted 1 hour of their spare time
on
visiting places at the same Change preposition
to
time
for Brazilians
2 hours
was sufficient.
Comparing American and Turkish
visitors in terms of visiting beach
, they dedicated 4 Fix the agreement mistake
beaches
hours
and 5 hours
respectively. Americans represented themselves as true book lovers in comparison with Turkish
people, by dedicating 1 hour more for
reading books. Change preposition
to
However
, in visiting places
they were even by both allocating 3 Add a comma
places,
hours
for this
activity.Submitted by teymur.valikhan80 on
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