The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs
illuestrate
the Correct your spelling
illustrate
number
of shops
that closing
and Wrong verb form
closed
opening
in certain Wrong verb form
opened
country
, between 2011 to 2018.
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
Overall
, it is clear that
the number
of closed shops
had higher numbers compared to opening shops
at the start, with more fluctuation in closed
Correct article usage
the closed
shops
figure, it dominated another at the end
of given
period.
In 2011, the opening Add an article
a given
the given
shops
had realatively
higher numbers at the start, accounting for 8,5000. Correct your spelling
relatively
This
figure experienced Correct article usage
a substantially
substantially
decrease at the lower level Change the word
substantial
at
4,000, followed by some fluctuation and been at the same level in 2015, remaining Change preposition
of
consistently
till 2017 with a minimal decline to 3,000 Change the word
consistent
at the end
. In comparison, the number
of opening shops
began lower at 6,200 in 2011, experiencing dramatic fluctuation with a notable dropping point at
2015 with 500 in 2015 before rising to just over 5,000 in 2016, Change preposition
in
then
remained steady to the end.
In summary, both number
of Change the article
the number
shop
opening and closing had Fix the agreement mistake
shops
significant
decreased throughout the 7 Change the adjective
significantly
year-period
. Correct your spelling
year period
However
, the number
of opened shops
had minimal
decline compared to opening Correct article usage
a minimal
shops
, although
it saw a significant dropped
in 2015.Replace the word
drop
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