The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs
illuestrate
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illustrate
the
number
of
shops
that
closing
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closed
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and
opening
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opened
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in certain
country
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countries
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, between 2011 to 2018.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of closed
shops
had higher numbers compared to opening
shops
at the start, with more fluctuation in
closed
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the closed
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shops
figure, it dominated another
at the end
of
given
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period. In 2011, the opening
shops
had
realatively
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relatively
higher numbers at the start, accounting for 8,5000.
This
figure experienced
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a substantially
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substantially
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decrease at the lower level
at
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of
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4,000, followed by some fluctuation and been at the same level in 2015, remaining
consistently
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consistent
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till 2017 with a minimal decline to 3,000
at the end
. In comparison, the
number
of opening
shops
began lower at 6,200 in 2011, experiencing dramatic fluctuation with a notable dropping point
at
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in
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2015 with 500 in 2015 before rising to just over 5,000 in 2016,
then
remained steady to the end. In summary, both
number
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the number
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of
shop
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shops
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opening and closing had
significant
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significantly
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decreased throughout the 7
year-period
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year period
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.
However
, the
number
of opened
shops
had
minimal
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a minimal
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decline compared to opening
shops
,
although
it saw a significant
dropped
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in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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