The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie diagram below illustrates data on the location and category of
dance
classes
minor people in Australia presently participate
.
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Overall
, there are 4 locations of
dance
classes
, Private
Sudios
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studios
, Community
Halls
, School
Halls
,
College-based
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and College-based
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Studios. The most significant location young people usually use is the Private Studios with around 48%,
However
, the lowest is College-based studios with only 10%. School
Halls
and Community
Halls
are
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are almost equal, School
Halls
is approximately 24%, and Community
Halls
is 18%. There are 3
type
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types
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of
dance
classes
, Ballet, Tap, and Modern with a different
of
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an
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age group. Ballet has the most attention from children under 11 with roughly 600
kid
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kids
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and the lowest of
age
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ages
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between 11 to 16. Tap and
Modren
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Modern
dances have
higher
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a higher
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amount of teenagers than
the
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apply
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ballet. In the end, all of
this
information is about the location of
dance
classes
and the type of dances.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, halls with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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