You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
Musical
instrument
are fun and nice to learn.but I wouldn't necessarily say they should learn it. Students who wish to major in arts and music school are often the people who insist on Fix the agreement mistake
instruments
this
idea. However
people with no Add a comma
However,
interests
in majoring in Fix the agreement mistake
interest
such
stuff would mostly agree. From my standpoint, i
strongly disagree. Learning music should not be Change the capitalization
I
as
necessity in school in any way shape or form.
Correct your spelling
a
Reasons
Fix the agreement mistake
Reason
why I disagree
is I believe that there are many other more important subjects to learn other than musical Add the comma(s)
, why I disagree,
instruments
. Instead
of the child learning how to play these instruments
, he or she could learn more beneficial subjects that will help him in the future. Other than that, the internet has become the center
of knowledge. If a person wants to learn how to play Change the spelling
centre
instruments
they can just simply search up how to do so.
In
the other hand, if the child is passionate about his or her musical career and Change preposition
On
want
to extend his or her knowledge Change the verb form
wants
in
musical Change preposition
of
instruments
then
they should have freedom
to do so. I see that the child having the freedom to choose Add an article
the freedom
weather
they want to be taught how to play it or not is up to them, strictly because it is not one of the main subjects.
In conclusion, I would Correct your spelling
whether
aregue
that, no, children shouldn't be forced to learn musical Correct your spelling
argue
instruments
beacause
as much as playing Correct your spelling
because
instruments
can be fun and beneficial sometimes, many children are not into musical art as much as some students are. however
, they should have the freedom to chose
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choose
weather
they want to or not.Correct your spelling
whether
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