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The pie charts below showshow preferred social media channels for youth in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below showshow preferred social media channels for youth in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 pie charts accounted types of social media channels for youth in the United Kingdom and what they preferred from 2012 to 2017.
overall
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change in the five years,
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 the obvious large segment in both chats is
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TV , which
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 in 2012 and it increased
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percentage
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45% in 2017.
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secondary
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The print to be in level 2 ,by
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2012
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ten and in
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2017 is four to ten , And
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digital is six on ten in
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2012 unlike the 2017 when it
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became
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the cinema
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outdoor
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is
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 the same in both
pies
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parties
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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