Many people think that the behaviour of professional sportsmen/sportswomen on or off the field is not important as long as they are good players.To what extent do you agree or disagree with it ?
Sports
is an important aspect Change the noun form
Sport
in
every nation. A large number of people say that professional sportsperson's Change preposition
of
behaviour
is not Vital
point whether off Correct article usage
a Vital
field
or on Add an article
the field
field
as long as they are good Add an article
the field
players
. I strongly disagree with this
statement, and this
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons..
To commence with, a good Replace the punctuation
.
...
Sports
person should! maintain his behaviour
in correct
way even if he plays Correct article usage
the correct
good
because many people take them as role models So they always maintain some decorum. Change the word
well
That is
to say, they are not only sports
players
but also
celebrities, So Spotlight is inevitable for their professional and personal life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
, Some Indian cricket players
were accompained
Correct your spelling
accompanied
with
their Change preposition
by
girlfriend
when the Fix the agreement mistake
girlfriends
last
year of ICC
match, but they did not perform well, and Correct article usage
the ICC
as a result
, fans were blamed to
their personal life was the major reason Change preposition
on
of lost
the match. Change preposition
for losing
In other words
, Professional sports
players
' behaviours are first come
before their performance.
Change to the active voice
first come
have first come
Furthermore
, Sports
player should be discipling
in their Correct your spelling
disciplined
both
lives because Correct pronoun usage
apply
sports
require discipline
. This
is, if a sports
Person does not be discipline
how he plays in the Wrong verb form
disciplined
field
with discipline
, so sports
and behaviours are interconnected. For instance
, in the
Soccer match, Correct article usage
a
players
Change noun form
players'
player's
behaviour
insight the field
is more essential besides
they will get a red card between match
. Fix the agreement mistake
matches
Hence
, sportsmen Should follow and maintain their behaviour
.
In conclusion, Professional sportsmen's behaviour
is crucial in
Change preposition
on
Add an article
the off
off
Add a hyphen
off-field
field
and on
Add a hyphen
on-field
field
because they are being
role models for Verb problem
apply
normal
population Correct article usage
the normal
along
with Change preposition
apply
sports
need
Some Correct pronoun usage
that need
discipline
by
behavioural activities. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, I Strongly disagree, this
Professional players
' behaviour
is Vital as long as they are good. Players
.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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