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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates how much money developing
countries
 in the USA,EU
countries
 and other
countries
 between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
,it is clearly seen that in the USA,EU
countries
 and other
countries
 experienced
an upward trends
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an upward trend
upward trends
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 over the period. In detail, in the USA started at 9.8
million
dollars
,and increased slightly to 11 in 2007.The
figure
 fluctuated between 11 and 17 in 2007 and 2009.
Then
proportion
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the proportion
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 increased gradually to 20.3
million
dollars
.In
case
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the case
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 of EU
countries
 started at 3.1
million
dollars
,and grew
up
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apply
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to 3.9 over the next 2 years.The
figure
 decreased merely to 4.1
million
dollars
 in 2010.
However
,the proportion of other
countries
 started at 2.8
million
dollars
,and rose steadily to 3.5
million
dallors
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dollars
 in 2008.The
figure
 dropped to 3.2
million
dallors
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dollars
,
then
 climbed dramatically to 3.7 in the final year.Regarding to total,started at 15.7
million
dallors
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dollars
,and escalated significantly to 24.4
million
dallors
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dollars
.After that,the
figure
exprienced
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experienced
fluctuate
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fluctuates
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 between 23.5
million
dallors
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dollars
 and 28.1
million
dallors
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dollars
 in 2009 and 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, million, dollars, figure, dallors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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