: The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

: The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
The data below illustrates
about
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how families in random countries spent their weekly income in 1968
comparison
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with the 2018 year.  
Overall
, we can see that almost all spending accepts have been changed. And most of the money goes to food and
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leisure
.   
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,
spendings
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for
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food
have
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decreased. It was just over one-third of all income in 1968,
while
in twenty-eighth,
this
number has gone downward almost
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twice.
Further
, in 1968, house spending was predictable lower than after half a century,
such
as transportation spending, which was only about 7%; meanwhile, in 2018,
this
number
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reached almost 15
percent
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.   The graph
also
suggests that
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spheres like household goods,
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fuel
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and power, and personal goods did not reach even 10%
whereas
demand for those kinds of products did not increase. But 55 years ago there was exactly ten
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for
clouthes
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clothes
, and in 2018 there was down to 5
percent
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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