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Some people believe that Professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish discuss both these weeds and give your own opinion

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In modern days, some people
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the
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belief
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 that professionals like doctors and engineers should be free to work in any
country
 that they want; meanwhile, others think that they should be able to work only in
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country
 where they did their training. I think that all professionals should have an opportunity to earn more money in more developed places. In today's reality, most of the growing countries have a deficit of professional workers. For that reason, developed countries are ready to pay more for
such
 workers than undeveloped ones, and
this
 is one of the biggest differences between them. As far as they understand
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more and more people are interested mostly in salary. And in my view, there is nothing wrong with it. Because they overlap interests each other.
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,
such
 huge leaders as Germany and the USA every five years increased the percentage of
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migration professionals by about 7
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.   
However
, forcing these experts far local authorities where they get education for free is considered a good way to show their gratitude. Simply, the government has invested a part of its budget into educators and facilities with the hope that it can bring them an ultimate educational environment in which learners have a chance to reveal all their potential. In return, these governments want them to serve their residents
as well as
 the
country
.
Besides
, a lack of skilled workforce is always a controversial issue which puts great pressure on the governors and society.  
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, in fact,
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there are a lot of people who are dreaming
to build
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 their careers abroad
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local education.
Although
 they might work for the sponsor
country
, from
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respect
. I think there shouldn't be any space to limit human rights.
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